Re: THE MIRROR Nr.10/5.3.07 - p.58-62.
You, Uwe Buse, have undertaken to write an article about a small town in Saxony-Anhalt, is to be created in a laboratory test work for everyone. God knows who was so bold, not just to stop your flow of writing. Her article, he is in fact, ludicrous with all due respect.
It should not be practiced here at the contents of criticism. The fact that Spiegel article are becoming shallower and content-less, it has become accustomed. It must be the habit that makes a commit every Monday and again the stupidity of buying a new edition. No, actually it is the only practical format, under the weeklies since the demise of the "week" has no equal (of Focus, Stern apart like junk, of course). But now that the style sometimes so hard to digest is that you can read some articles only in stages, is now yet another increase.
In your article, Mr. Buse, help yourself now of a very peculiar style of composition. Repeat that is in almost inflationary manner immediately after mentioning the subject of the sentence as a real thing, personal pronoun. The example that it is brought in this sentence shall apply. But for authenticity's sake, here are all original examples are given, which is not excluded that one or the other, has been overlooked due to the volume:
- The unemployment rate, it was encased in concrete as ...
- What is new, it was a simple idea ...
- Annelies Strobel's work, it starts at ten clock ...
- Your pension, it is bad ...
- The experiment, it has changed ... Bad Schmiedeberg
- The unemployment rate, before the start of the experiment in Bad Schmiedeberg, it stood at 15.9 percent, it is now at 6.3 percent ...
What, Mr. Buse, you achieve with it? Repeat the subject, because you are afraid to lose the thread, or else about, because you think you the reader can not follow then? Or maybe you want to prove that you can determine the gender of German nouns? These kinds of oddities or work to a newspaper in the East Frisian in neutral? Reading, it is at least as to what would torment at the last statement, when omitting the personal pronoun "it" wrote: "The experiment has changed BS"? Except, of course, that the sentence is a lot more reader-friendly. From time to time like this stylistic device called prolepsis to emphasize the subject's certainly not without meaning, but not fewer than six times in an article please! The style, it is a reminder of a very second-rate television commentators regional programs where under - probably unconscious - lined the help of this stylistic device is that it has nothing to say. Then we know things like: The Flood, it rises ... the sandbags, they are scarce ... the mission is over. Der Spiegel, he is increasingly unpalatable ...











